Tuesday, August 23, 2011

A winner and a rerun

We have a winner in The Prude's birthday drawing!
Thank you to everyone who left a comment.
Anonymous, I couldn't quite make out what you were saying, but thank you anyway.
Congratulations Joanie! You will receive a $25 Amazon gift card.
Below is the post I believe she was referring to:

Hey You! Drop That Adverb!


We all know what adverbs are, correct? They take a plain old verb, dress it up with an ‘ly’ word here or there and give it all kinds of nuanced meaning.

Recently, The Prude’s writing buddies told her reluctantly that adverbs unfortunately are currently Not in Style.  Sadly, Your Prude carefully reread her work and grudgingly admitted that she suffers rather severely from B.O.A.T. (Broad Overuse of Adverbs Tendency). She realized she should immediately rectify this tendency by stringently limiting her use of adverbs.

Take, for example, the above paragraph. Stripped of adverbs, it reads:
The Prude’s writing buddies told her that adverbs are Not in Style. Your Prude reread her work and admitted she suffers from B.O.A.T. She realized she should rectify this situation by limiting her use of adverbs.

There you go. Nice, terse, spare sentences. Sentences that get right down to brass tacks with no shilly-shallying. Verbs that stand alone, stripped of their adverbs. The Prude is thinking those verbs look downright chilly.

There is a parallel writing style, all the rage, that encourages one to show, through action and description, what is occurring. This style also uses Strong Verbs. Verbs that need no help from any floofy adverbs.

So The Prude’s paragraph in this manifestation would read:
In the short time preceding this post, The Prude’s writing buddies, their brows furrowed and their voices hushed, apprised her that adverbs, whose fortunes have been declining, are at this present time Not in Style. With overflowing eyes and lurching stomach Your Prude scrutinized her work and was aggrieved and nauseated to discover herself rocking in the B.O.A.T. She clapped her hand to her forehead and lost no time bailing this flood of adverbs.

See? Strong, muscular verbs. Metaphors. Visual images. The above paragraph is virtually dog-paddling in them, with nary an adverb in sight.

The Prude will work hard in upcoming posts to stay away from the B.O.A.T. She expects things will go swimmingly…
 

4 comments:

Lori Lipsky said...

Another great post. I'm glad to be reminded of it. Thankfully, Joanie won so it was re-posted.

Congratulations, Joanie!!! Happy shopping.

Robin J. Steinweg said...

I mistily say goodbye to the Prude's adverbs. How happily will I greet them when they shyly peek forth again!

Poor adverbs.
Poor Prude.
Poor me.
Poor deprived sentences.
Poor "nekked" verbs.

The Prude said...

Robin, your comments should have a blog of their own.
They are classics!

Joanie said...

Great job, Prudie! Powerful verbs boast your skill!
Thanks for the shopping spree!